Alright, just thought I'd say that I cannot read an entire work on DA and not comment on it. If I commented on your piece I want you to know I read it all the way through. I also cannot just say something like, "Awesome, I loved it," because to me that implies that I think it was perfect, which is rarely the case. I never want anyone to read a comment from me and be offended. I am happy you are writing, and I just want to help you get better, even though I don't really have much in the way of formal training myself. I do read a lot of books though, and I am the audience, and so I think that gives me enough right to at least suggest things you